Shane and Shayla's alarm was going psycho. As soon as Shane heard his alarm he jumped to his feet to wake everyone up. Everyone was packing their bags. Dennis, Shane's dad was packing his fishing gear because he loved fishing. Pam, Shane's mum and his sister Shayla were packing their swimming gear. They put all their bags in the truck. After 30 minutes they were at the dock waiting for the Cruise ship....
After about 10 minutes or so Shayla asked her mum " do we have the right time?" Pam, Shayla's mum told everyone that it was the right time to be there. Just in case she looked at the tickets. It said the Cruise ship would leave on the 9/5/16 but it was only the 8/5/16.
Everyone was looking at Pam to hear the results. She was embarrassed her face went red. She told everyone the bad news. After a while they were back in the driveway. Shayla was asleep but Shane was to excited to go to sleep
"This is a record of my learning during my time at Mangonui School. Ka Kite Ano!"
What an exciting start Shayla. I really like your first sentence. Use precise words when explaining your problem and solution
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